Dose this sound professional??

No. Your spelling is way off there, buddy. I also think that there were a lot of words that maybe were unnecessary. You know the "big kind" I know that sounds childish, I'm aware, but often times when I see bigger words in pieces like that I am not a fan, bigger words don't necessary equate to better, you know? I mean it's good, sorry if I sound like a *****, but it's not probably "professional" I'd say.